Monday, June 19, 2006

Ghost !!


It was a hot and humid Sunday afternoon. I was lazing around with pretty much nothing to do and since my mom was out on a vacation, unfortunately I was all alone too. So I was thinking about what I should do, when suddenly it occurred to me, why not write a story. So here it is. Now this story has traces of the movie "Ghost" in it. But this is still wholly mine.

It was a hot and humid Sunday afternoon, when the six friends started out to on their trip. They thought they could take a long drive to beat the heat. They were driving far out of the city when they came upon a lovely boating area. Obviously the girls in the group wanted to try it out. So they jumped out. They all went. It was indeed lovely. It was beautiful lagoon with lovely blue water and small coves here and there and a small strip of land a few metres away that seperated the lagoon and the sea. So they picked up a boat fit enough for all six of them and started rowing. They dint take lifejackets, as it was hot and humid in the first place and it would only make it more stuffy plus they dint think they needed it, as the water seemed safe enough. They kept rowing and stopped at all the coves resting for a while, talking non-stop all the way and enjoying the boat ride. It started getting dark. All of them talking, none of them noticed the signboard at one cove that said "Dangerous area, stay out !". They went into that cove. The water was turbulent there. It was kind of like a whirlpool. They all panicked as the water rose from all sides. They tried to keep rowing but in vain. Then they all just clung on to the boat and saw the water rising like a giant, ready to swallow them. One of them, thought he could swim out of it and jumped into the water and then all of them followed him, taking his example. Finally they all swam out and towards the strip of land, lying exhausted in the sand.

Slowly they got up and took stock of their surroundings. There was nothing there. They gathered the wood from the splintered boat that was drifting about and set it out to dry. After a while they started a fire and all settled around it. All of them were exhausted and scared but they thought that once it dawned, help would come. Someone has to come looking for them. So they sat and waited and started speaking to each other again like normal, slowly coming out the shock. Then it got darker and the girls were scared about ghosts and the guys tried to scare them by narrating ghost stories. They did that for a long time till one of the girls started crying and then they stopped. Everybody was exhausted and slowly they all fell asleep around the fire. Time passed and dawn came as the fire slowly sputtered and died out. One of the friends woke up as he heard some commotion at a distance. He saw police cars and lights and people searching. He was excited and woke all of them up. They all started screaming and making as much noise as possible hoping somebody would hear them. Then they all stopped suddenly watching spellbound, staring at the scene in the distance, as someone let out a wail of terror seeing the bodies being pulled out of the water. There were six of them.

Good Afternoon !

5 comments:

Sugavasi said...

Wow...that was a good one..Uma.
A very ordinary beginning and a very "Ghost story" like twist in the ending.

Anonymous said...

Wow Uma,
you sure have a flair of writing.
What seems a simple story turns out to be way different with such a twist to it :)
keep it up .
warm regards
Prasanna

Uma said...

Thanks prasanna..ur comments matter to me..keep reading..Take care

Anonymous said...

Whoaa...The ending really freaked me out!!

Uma said...

Hmm..U r Freaky !

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